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Some people argue that the technology such as mobile phone destroys social interaction. Do you agree or disagree.

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It is considered that several advancements like cell phones and computers are ruining the social life among
people
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. I completely agree with the above statement as electronic gadgets
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 a major part in ending the fellowship.
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, social relationships are necessary for every individual in the world.
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,
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people
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 are not being expressive in
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physical contact.
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 they are in touch with their loved ones over
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, still they do not understand them due to
lack
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a lack
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 of physical bonding and face to face conversation.
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, individuals are occupying themselves with the electronic item which makes them less expressive and feels like not participating in social life.
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 is the primary reason
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 gadgets that are mostly utilised by
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youngsters now.
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attending social gatherings,
people
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 still spend their time using mobile phones
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 of communicating with their groups.
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, children are utilizing their most of the time in playing video games which distracts them to concentrate on
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.
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, they cannot able to communicate properly with others and learn moral values at their age which result in their misbehaviour and arrogance.
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, kids cannot able to educate themselves with certain ethics which will be useful in
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 long run.
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, children
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 frustrated being in public because their addiction makes them comfortable being in isolation.
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 impacts their social relationships which are very crucial to develop themselves in
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society. To conclude, without any doubt facilities provided by technology are outstanding,
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, the physical bonding and one-to-one conversations are destroyed today but if we can understand them and try to gel with
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then
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 the destruction can be controlled.
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