Wealthy countries should accept more refugees and provide them with basic assistance such as food and housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Migrants from poor states should be accommodated and offered
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basic needs of food and living. I strongly agree with the idea of allowing foreigners to come and settle in developed
countries
against certain criteria and provide them with fundamental necessities of
life
.
This
will give them a chance to earn bread and butter for themselves and their families. It will
also
help
country’s
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growth because newly settled will pay
taxes
which will contribute towards the better economy of that
country
.
People
should be given an opportunity
of
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employment to be able to take care of their loved ones.
This
is
basic
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right of every human to have food, housing, health, and education. The governments should be accountable to provide
such
necessities of
life
to every citizen. Developed
countries
like U.S, Australia and Canada are
the
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examples of
such
states that took responsibility and delivered essential to their
people
.
Economy
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of the
country
heavily depends on the
taxes
collected by its
people
;
therefore
,
taxes
should be collected from locals and refugees, according to their income, benefits and facilities provided to them. Developed and
corruption free
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government collects
taxes
from their
people
and make sure to spend it back on their nation for the betterment of
country
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and to improve the living standard of their
people
.
Countries
like U.S, Australia and Canada attracts immigrants to
fulfill
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its
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need
of
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skilled and unskilled
labor
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and give them
basics
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of
life
.
This
way they become part of
countries
economic growth by working in that
country
and paying the
taxes
. In conclusion, outsiders should be accepted by rich
countries
and give them fundamental support of
life
. By
this
, they will get an opportunity to better employment which will improve their own living and
as a
result
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they will become taxpayers contributing to
economy
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of
country
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Refugees
  • Asylum seekers
  • Humanitarian aid
  • Integration
  • Multiculturalism
  • Economic impact
  • Public services
  • International law
  • Conventions relating to the status of refugees
  • Labor market
  • Cultural enrichment
  • Burden-sharing
  • Resettlement programs
  • Host country
  • Border security
  • Comprehensive policy
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