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The bar graph elucidates differences in the amount of expenditure on six consumables in four different nations. At a cursory glance, it is clearly seen that while the highest amount of money was allocated for photography and the
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 spent the most. The most striking feature here is that overall Germany’s expenditure was nearly 50% of the
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 ‘s total figure of half of the given items, except perfume,racquets and personal stereos. Regarding toys, and CDs, which stood at
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 place in France and the
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 with above 155$ and 165$ respectively ;
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, Italy allocated approximately 150$. The
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 is the biggest consumer with 170$ was allocated only for photography, followed by France, and both Germany and Italy spent an equal amount. When considering
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 position was adorned by both the
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 and Italy. Expenditure on Toys and CDs, France
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