Many people spend a large amount of money on celebrating birthdays and weddings. Others think that it is unnecessary to spend so much on these events. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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People celebrate their special days
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as weddings and birthdays which are considered
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. While others say that it is completely a waste of
money
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. I will discuss both opinions in
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essay and
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, conclude my side. In
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hectic life, people only get few chances to gather as everyone is working hard to meet their expenses.
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, they organize functions to collect memories, celebrate and
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,
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get a break from busy life. In some countries, it is considered
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tradition like, in India, weddings are performed in front of the society for three days with extravagant spending.
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, children living far from their parents like, in foreign countries, get
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quality time to spend with their families and relatives. The quality of time you spend matters most than the quantity.
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, there is
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a belief that celebrations are no more than just
money
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wastage as they can
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use
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money
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in many ways. To illustrate,
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of throwing a party, travelling abroad at
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price will be more beneficial that helps to learn something new about other cultures.
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to that, adding to your knowledge is
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way to invest
money
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as joining your desirable language learning course. In these ways, people will get to know more about other nation's living
style
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, ethics, languages and so on. In conclusion, celebrations are important in one's life and every person has their own aspect on
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topic. So, I believe that celebrating your days are much more important than doing something else. You will collect memories with your loved ones to remember.
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