Many people spend a large amount of money on celebrating birthdays and weddings. Others think that it is unnecessary to spend so much on these events. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

People celebrate their special days
such
as weddings and birthdays which are considered
a remarkable ones
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. While others say that it is completely a waste of
money
. I will discuss both opinions in
this
essay and
then
, conclude my side. In
this
hectic life, people only get few chances to gather as everyone is working hard to meet their expenses.
Therefore
, they organize functions to collect memories, celebrate and
also
,
to
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get a break from busy life. In some countries, it is considered
as
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tradition like, in India, weddings are performed in front of the society for three days with extravagant spending.
Moreover
, children living far from their parents like, in foreign countries, get
a
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quality time to spend with their families and relatives. The quality of time you spend matters most than the quantity.
On the other hand
, there is
also
a belief that celebrations are no more than just
money
wastage as they can
also
use
this
money
in many ways. To illustrate,
instead
of throwing a party, travelling abroad at
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price will be more beneficial that helps to learn something new about other cultures.
In addition
to that, adding to your knowledge is
best
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way to invest
money
such
as joining your desirable language learning course. In these ways, people will get to know more about other nation's living
style
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, ethics, languages and so on. In conclusion, celebrations are important in one's life and every person has their own aspect on
this
topic. So, I believe that celebrating your days are much more important than doing something else. You will collect memories with your loved ones to remember.
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