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Whoever controls the media also controls opinions and attitudes of the people and there is little that can be done to rectify this. To what extent you agree or disagree?

#controls #media #attitudes #people
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It is affirmed that several population’s
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 of
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 manages
people
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’s attitudes and highly influence their
opinion
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 on a certain topic.
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this
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 situation is almost irreversible. I disagree with the prompt and in
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 with, mass
media
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 use powerful communication’s
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 to convince
people
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, even though they
cannot control their behaviour neither
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cannot control their behaviour either
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 a
person
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opinion
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. Journalists are very well-trained professionals and they use several
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neurolinguistics strategies to capture the spectator’s attention.
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, the way that individuals receive that
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 certainly influence how they act and live,
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 is totally a person’s responsibility to deal with that. Unfortunately,
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society cannot rely on their way to provide
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, because they might be too polemical over an irrelevant subject. What can be done is
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 aware that they are trying to dictate their position.
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 the mass
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 might be strong
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opinion makers
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 and quite persuasive,
people
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 must be more self-informant to avoid being played by the
media
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. To explain,
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society needs to learn how to filter the
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 and study parallelly the content
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, they will not let themselves be captured by the beautiful speech
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people
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 have. To illustrate, in Brazil,
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 are becoming more engaged in certain country’s issues
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though
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 social
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, because there, it is possible to have fast
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 and from wider specialists.
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, all that persuasive position the
media
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 has is not In conclusion, I strongly disagree with what is being affirmed because even though the mass
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 are extremely influential because they are a majority source of
people
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’s
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, they cannot control how
people
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 behave neither what kind
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opinion
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of opinion
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 they might have. They are influential because they use communication’s strategies and
people
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 need to be more self-aware and engaged
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 important matters.
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