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Some people believe that the best way to increase the road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars. To what extent do you agree?

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Some individuals believe that road safety will be optimized to a certain extent by raising the minimum driving
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 I accept that
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 approach can make significant prevention for traffic accidents, I strongly assume that there are much better solutions and measures to enhance road safety. On the one hand, increasing the legal
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 for driving is beneficial due to several reasons.
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 with, one of the common factors that lead to an accident is a lack of discipline. Since young people from most countries have the right to drive after the
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 of 28, they might not be aware of the consequences of what they do. Being teenagers, their thrill-seeking behaviour, mood swings and impulses have the potential to adversely affect not only their driving skills but
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 their decision-making skills.
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, they are more likely to disobey the rules and tend to drive beyond limited speed. Due to these reasons, teens can create more chances of resulting in serious accidents than those who are in their 20s.
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, older drivers are more capable of reacting quickly and handling emergencies effectively than young ones due to a great pool of experience. Teenagers might make decisions, being panic-stricken, in dangerous situations
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 as traffic hazards.
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, I believe that there are better measures to enhance road safety. Improving the quality of public transportations can solve
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 puzzle to a considerable extent. Authorities not only should expand bus routes, especially in populated areas, but
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 should invest more money in the construction of new suburbs so that people tend to use public transports rather than private vehicles. In
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 way, the level of mobile accidents can be reduced substantially. To conclude, even though raising the driving
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 can have solid advantages, I personally think that it cannot outweigh other essential factors
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 as improving the quality of public transport.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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