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Computers are being used more and more in education. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your own opinion.

#computers #education
The usage of
computers
 has been inclining in
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all aspect of life, particularly in the process of learning and teaching for the
last
 few decades. There are certain pros and cons of
this
 development and shed light on them in the
next
 few paragraphs. I believe that
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 of
this
 phenomenon
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 far more than
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.
To begin
 with, there are a few drawbacks to computerized
education
 programs. Most computer systems are devised for average IQ level
students
such
 as they are above the level weak intelligence pupils,
however
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 they are below the abilities of genius scholars.
That is
 why
education
 of extreme IQ level
students
 has been
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jeopardized
.
Moreover
, the utilization of
computers
 is widening the
education
 gap between the developed countries and the
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under developed
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 nations, as the
poverty stricken
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 nations do not have cutting edge information technology facilities.
On the contrary
, there are enormous benefits of the involvement of
computers
 in
education
.
First
 and foremost,
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education
 is far cheaper than human teaching.
Secondly
, it is very convenient for
students
 and educators,
for
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 the children who opt
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 learning do not need to commute to institutes which can save
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valuable time and money for them. In conclusion, even though
non flexible
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 software
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 not friendly for weak
students
, they are the
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cost
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 effective and easiest way to seek knowledge. I think that a
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hybrid
 model of
education
 would be more effective rather than sticking to only one way of teaching either by humans teachers or
computers
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Interactive learning tools
  • 2. Multimedia presentations
  • 3. Online resources
  • 4. Distance learning
  • 5. Remote areas
  • 6. Digital literacy
  • 7. Problem-solving
  • 8. Critical thinking
  • 9. Technology-driven world
  • 10. Digital textbooks
  • 11. Administrative tasks
  • 12. Cost-effective
  • 13. Distraction
  • 14. Social media
  • 15. Over-reliance
  • 16. Traditional skills
  • 17. Handwriting
  • 18. Face-to-face communication
  • 19. Technical problems
  • 20. Digital divide
  • 21. Inequality
  • 22. Educational opportunities
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