Some people are of the opinion that being highly qualified is the only way to ensure a well-paying job. While others believe that having work experience is the best way to get a well-paying job. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Although
it's believed by certain individuals that to get a well-paying
job
is being highly qualified, whereas others argue that to get a well-paying
job
is obtained by having work
experience
. In my opinion, I completely disagree with the
first
opinion considering
experience
is could be
also
covered highly qualified skills
Firstly
, when
people
are experienced at their expertise it is proven that they already passed the
first
test to define high qualifications for the
first
time. Many years ago, they took the test to show their skills.
For example
, when
people
want to be a mechanic, they should be passed on knowledge tests and technical tests.
Secondly
, with
experience
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it could be shown that the person has for a long time applied their high qualifications during work. Almost experienced worker success to
proven
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their skills
instead
of fresh graduates.
For example
, experienced
workers
will have advantages about facts and tricks in the field
instead
of highly qualified ones that only depend on their knowledge. With
experience
, they will know more
how
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about how
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to solve field problems using their
experience
.
Lastly
,
experience
has a strong relationship with leadership, high
experience
will give
much benefit
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on
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people
's maturity. To get a well-paying
job
,
workers
should achieve something and be a leader.
On the other hand
, we could not ignore high qualified
workers
.
This
way should be had by
workers
since the
first
time, like when graduates from University or school. High qualifications
is
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the door to get a career. In conclusion, while many
people
vary in opinions, I think we can not directly justify that highly qualified
people
deserve to get a well-paying
job
more than experienced
workers
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Highly qualified
  • Well-paying job
  • Securing
  • Knowledge
  • Expertise
  • Higher positions
  • Higher salaries
  • Practical skills
  • Real-world setting
  • Employers value
  • Professional connections
  • Ideal
  • Industry
  • Job role
  • Opinion
  • Experience
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