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Not enough students around the world choose to study science subjects at university. What are the reasons for this? What impact does this issue have on society?

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The development in
science
 is the key point of any successful county.
However
, the vast majority of students do not select a
science
 subject to study at university
instead
, they tend to choose more common subjects like business or Arts. The following paragraph will illustrate the causes behind selecting other options over a
science
 major as well as its impact on the
community
.
First
 of all,
science
 plays important role in society
thus
community
 requires more graduates with a
science
 background.
Nevertheless
, a
science
 major demands extreme hard work as well as dedication
therefore
, the younger generation does not want to involve in
this
 subject.
In addition
 to that, looking at the future demand and supply in the
science
 field is not balanced so students do not want to put their time into an unpredicted future.
For instance
, many students who go to a foreign county for
further
 study choose another field to study over
science
 since other fields like arts or business are in demand as well as they have better future options in terms of getting a job.
On the other hand
, a lack of
science
 graduates could lead to many complications in society.
Moreover
, there is already
shortage
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 of doctors, nurses and IT
people
for
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 the
community
, and
best
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the best
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 example could be COVID-19. During
this
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this pendamic person
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pendamic
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pandemic
people
 already suffered huge
loses
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, and
that is
 due to
lack
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the lack
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 of sufficient talented
people
. Apart from that, technological advancement even making
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the situation
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situation
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situations
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 worst as society
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does
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dose
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does
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 not have enough IT
professional
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professionals
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 who can protect
people
 from
cyber crime
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cybercrime
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. In conclusion,
people
 need more
science
graduate
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graduates
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 to
fulfill
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fulfil
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 the requirement of the
community
, and
that is
 the best way to solve
people
's
problem
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problems
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.
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