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While some argue that the internet is a blessing as it helps with information, others think that it is not necessary to have such smount of information.What is your opinion?

The internet is a part of modern life, and
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 avails many benefits, according to some.
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 of an excess amount of
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 has detrimental effects. In my opinion, to a large
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 because the platform is not only unregulated, which
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 undue stress but the flooding of
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 often makes it difficult to choose the right choice as well.
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 daily life is challenging. To illustrate
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, when netizens search about causes of headache, the list ranging from cold to cancer. Eventually, the subscribers tend to find difficulty in deciding what matches his or her actual problems and create mental trauma as well.
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 available,
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 creates stress rather than any relief.
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, the authenticity of the
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 is hard to judge. Because of the anonymity of the digital space, users are often fooled.
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, as everyone has smartphones, the owners may pretend to be an expert, utilise virtual media as an instrument to disseminate his or her propaganda. Having dangerous consequences, many consider there must be a limitation when searching the internet to find answers. In conclusion, some people argue that it is unnecessary to reach a wide range of data online. I firmly support the view because the content rarely
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 and it is not easy to pick the most accurate solution.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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