While some argue that the internet is a blessing as it helps with information, others think that it is not necessary to have such smount of information.What is your opinion?

The internet is a part of modern life, and
this
avails many benefits, according to some.
However
, there are some people thinking that
availability
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of an excess amount of
information
has detrimental effects. In my opinion, to a large
extent
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I
agree
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this
because the platform is not only unregulated, which
causing
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undue stress but the flooding of
information
often makes it difficult to choose the right choice as well.
First
and foremost, online sites are hardly censored by any regulatory body. Since
this
offers plenty of data on varieties of topics, how to use
this
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daily life is challenging. To illustrate
this
, when netizens search about causes of headache, the list ranging from cold to cancer. Eventually, the subscribers tend to find difficulty in deciding what matches his or her actual problems and create mental trauma as well.
Thus
, it is obvious that even though
information
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available,
this
creates stress rather than any relief.
Secondly
, the authenticity of the
information
is hard to judge. Because of the anonymity of the digital space, users are often fooled.
For instance
, as everyone has smartphones, the owners may pretend to be an expert, utilise virtual media as an instrument to disseminate his or her propaganda. Having dangerous consequences, many consider there must be a limitation when searching the internet to find answers. In conclusion, some people argue that it is unnecessary to reach a wide range of data online. I firmly support the view because the content rarely
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we see
regulating
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and it is not easy to pick the most accurate solution.
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