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Many people believe that social networking sites such as Facebook have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

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It is believed by numerous
people
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 that social networking sites, namely Facebook, have had a detrimental effect on
people
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 and
society
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. I somewhat agree that excessive
use
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 of Facebook, Instagram and Twitter have had a negative impact on both individuals and
society
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, but the positive side of social networking sites cannot be ignored. Social media has connected
people
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 from all around the globe, it has helped
people
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 to stay in touch with their near and dear ones. Social media had played an imperative role in covid-19 to stay connected with friends and family when it was impossible to meet them in person, as well as it had helped numerous covid patients to find hospitals, oxygen and medicines.
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, the social platform has helped to thrive several small businesses through promotion and ads, which aid them to reach more
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 and flourish their sales.
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, social networks have not only made it easier to stay connected with loved ones but
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 have helped small businesses to thrive.
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, excessive
use
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 of social platforms has numerous detrimental effects,
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 as
people
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 tend to spend hours scrolling which makes them procrastinate and unproductive.
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, there are many sensitive contents and misinformation with the growing number of users on the internet community. These types of content could hinder the mental health of individuals and have a negative effect on
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.
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, excessive
use
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 of social networks hinders
people
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's productivity and health and could have a negative impact on
society
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. In conclusion, there are both positive and negative aspects of social networking sites. To mitigate the detrimental aspects, individuals ought to judiciously
use
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 these social networks.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
  • personal information
  • mental health
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