Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extend do you agree or disagree whit this statement?

As technology and other opportunities are advanced nowadays, there are numerous possibilities in front of us. I completely agree
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this
viewpoint with considering the range in offers made by companies according to your wealth and the ease in finding everything
fit
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your wishes.
First
of all, limits are not valid, which is generally sourced from overseas or communication, anymore.
Therefore
, if you seek for new business or home
then
your searching horizon is not just your country but the
world
. Indeed, boundaries among the job sector have nearly disappeared due to digitalism and new job definitions. Provided that you have language, you can easily get contact with somebody in the other half of the
world
and find a job or move to another country.
For instance
, Australia has accepted so many migrants who
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provided only language requirements.
Second
of all, companies create different offers according to customer’s
situation
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for increasing
the
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diversity and reaching more people. Indeed, there are so many internet sites which consisted several brands and product which is used by all over the
world
. In
this
sense, from small brands to famous ones or clothes to household items, we are alone with several choices from all over the
world
with one click. Amazon and Alibaba are the most remarkable example of international trade. To conclude, people are freer when considering their options and deciding their life path rather than the older generations because of the technological facilities. All the options open a new door for the new generation for moving to another country, travelling, socializing with foreign people and live their life through their wishes.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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