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Some groups, such as poor people or people from rural area find it is difficult to access the university education. Universities should make it especially easy for the students come from the rural areas get an access to the university. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is often argued that being enrolled in higher
education
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 is rather difficult for
students
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 from suburban
areas
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. While I do agree that
universities
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 and governments should provide these
students
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 with necessary financial supports or subsidies, I do not think that other
requirements
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 for the enrollment of the university,
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 as academic
requirements
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, should be made different according to
students
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'
background
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. In terms of academic
requirements
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, people argue that different
areas
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 of the country get different resources of
education
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.
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, great
education
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 resources,
such
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 as highly educated teaching faculty, does not always equal
great
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 academic performance of the
students
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. It is the efforts that individual student makes that determines their grades.
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, governments and secondary schools are dedicating to provide rural
areas
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better
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with better
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 learning resources,
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 as taking advantage of the Internet and encouraging teachers to teach in less developed
areas
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. If
universities
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 made academic
requirements
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 easier for
students
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 from poor living conditions, it would be unfair for those from urban
areas
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 and
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 lead to poor motivation of these
students
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. In terms of tuition fees and other possible financial
requirements
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,
universities
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 should provide
with
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apply
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more support
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 as scholarships and student loans. It is believed that everyone should have the chance to get the
education
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 they deserve, most
students
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 from rural counties give up on their chances due to financial difficulties.
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, every year in China, it is common to read news about
students
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 who are accepted by prestigious
universities
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 hesitates on attending because their families cannot afford the tuition fees. With the help of the Chinese government and the university, these
students
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 are able to receive
education
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 and
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 become more competitive in the job market once they finish school. In conclusion, I believe it is not the academic achievements but the financial
requirements
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 that are stopping
students
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 of poor family backgrounds from pursuing better
education
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, and the
universities
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 and the governments should
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 offer assistance
accordingly
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.
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