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Some think the current generation should take steps to protect the environment for the next generation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Human intervention has affected the
environment
 on
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 basis.
However
, some parts of society opine that major steps should be taken to protect nature by the present
generation
 and that can largely benefit the younger
generation
. I entirely support
this
 position as it is the duty of the people to save the
environment
 before it gets extinct. As we know, humans are the victims of whatever bad is going on with the
environment
. Trees are frequently cut down to fulfil the demand of the population.
Similarly
, plastic usage is
on
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rising, which can be detrimental to the
environment
 and wildlife.
However
, large initiatives are taken by the government and to spread awareness about nature among the present
generation
.
For instance
, Denmark is a country where people started to plant one tree on their birthday.
Moreover
, many countries have found biodegradable bags, which can be a perfect alternative for plastic bags.
Furthermore
, the use of personal cars has become harmful to the
environment
. To overcome
this
 problem, the government has reduced taxes on transport fees, so that people will majorly travel from the public transport.
Moreover
, the burning of fossil fuels has impacted the
environment
 in several ways. To tackle
this
, countries are focusing on solar energy and wind energy for producing electricity. Fossil fuel burnt for car usage is reduced by the advent of electric cars. To conclude, these steps taken by the present population is essential to degrade the issues affecting the
environment
. Implementing a good lifestyle can make the future better for an upcoming
generation
.
Submitted by Yash on

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