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Some people believe that no one should be allowed to continue working after the age of 65. However others say that there should be no limitation on age and anyone should be allowed to work regardless of their age. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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According to few
people
,
age
 should be considered as a metric when it comes to
work
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 and nobody above the
age
 of 65 should be allowed to
work
. While others consider it as a preconceived notion and believe that individuals ought to be allowed to
work
 irrespective of
age
. In my opinion,
age
 should be considered as
criteria
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 in
work
.
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 essay shall
will
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discuss both the views and substantiate my opinion in the upcoming paragraphs. On the one hand, supporting
age
 as a metric has considerable factors behind it.
First
 and foremost, decreased productivity stems from the working of old-aged
people
. After a certain
age
,
the
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productivity starts declining and it cannot be controlled.
A recent
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 research has revealed that startups are growing at a rapid pace in comparison to the existing companies because of the young workforce employed in them.
In addition
 to
this
, elderly
people
 are used to outdated techniques.
For instance
, if an organization hires a
68 year old
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 as an accountant, he would
prefer
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 maintain accounts on a ledger rather than on a computer, which in turn, is outdated at present.
On the other hand
, not supporting
age
 as a parameter in working has valid reasons too.
To begin
 with, their working experience is considered as one of the most important
factor
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. As
people
 grow older, their experience
also
 grows with
age
.
In addition
, it is believed that elder
people
 are more disciplined as they have spent a tremendous amount of their life
into
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 corporates.
Hence
, they should be considered eligible to
work
. To conclude,
although
 old
people
 have more experience and are more disciplined in comparison to the youngsters, there is no use of aforementioned skills if they are less productive and are not able to cope up with the advancements in technology.
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