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Earlier technological developments brought more benefits and changed the lives of ordinary people more than recent technological developments To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, some
people
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 think that the advantage of technology in the 1900s was more beneficial and updated the quality of
life
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, While other
people
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 believe that the advancement of technology in 2000 gave convenience to the World. I think that the recent of developing has a lot of advantage for one's
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 in these days.
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 because,
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, 100 years ago, in terms of getting better
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 was that gets the house, more foods, more clothes and so on since industrial progress .
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 means that
people
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 only can be better about the basic factors for living.
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, today, most
people
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 think the way in which
people
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 avoid working or work less.
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,
people
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 start to develop for going to Mars.
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 means that
people
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 continue to make their
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 better.
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, in comparison, they only can get the basic thing of surviving in the past,whereas
people
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 start to think pioneering out of Earth. Another reason is that, following the
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 30 years, the Internet has made countries into one.
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,
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 can contact each other whenever or wherever. It does not matter how far from each other. What's more, fast communication has made fast World, of course, fast developing. In fact, time is getting shorter when
people
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 go to somewhere as developing of vehicle. In conclusion, to think of travelling to Mar and the benefit of the Internet, which is developed recently, that means to have better
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 more and more, faster and faster. I personally think that it is very natural to the public.
people
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 should be aware of how better than before.
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