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Do you agree or disagree because of more and more young people are studying and working overseas, this will bring greater international cooperation in the future?

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I am not of the view that young generations who are studying and working abroad will represent the nation in pursuit of common goals or interests in the coming years.
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 with, studying overseas take a lot of effort and perseverance. Some people prefer to go abroad to learn ideas and concepts internationally. Most of them are either belong to a higher class in the society or with scholarships given by prestigious companies, as tuition fees are doubled than the
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 of origin.
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, students who graduated from international schools have a greater opportunity to work in a world-class company.
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, it provides a better future for the individual and a bigger chance to work in the said
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.
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 to that, working abroad is one of the choices most people make. Due to the declining economic status of one's
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, other human beings choose to find a job in a foreign land.
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, it provides once in
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lifetime opportunity and delivers a competitive salary. Working overseas,
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, can develop skills and additional knowledge to the individual due to the different nature of work, experiences and dealing with multiple nationalities.
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, most people can impart their salaries to their respective families in their home
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, and to enhance their standard of living. Apart from that, it can give economic support to the nations. In conclusion, I do not believe that it will bring greater international cooperation because studying and working overseas is more on personal rather than economic reasons. The main cause is to acquire great jobs and better salaries to help their families, as well as their nations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural understanding
  • exposure
  • appreciate diversity
  • skill diversification
  • perspectives
  • collaborative global projects
  • networking
  • global networks
  • economic benefits
  • shared technological advancements
  • language proficiency
  • communication barriers
  • global problem-solving
  • tackle global issues
  • climate change
  • public health
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