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Nowadays in many countries people are spending too much on weddings some people think that it is essential to spend a huge amount of money on wedding ceremonies others think that have to be simple and not very grand discuss both views and give your opinion

#countries #people #weddings #amount #money #ceremonies
We are living in a century that much
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 are published in magazines, newspaper, books and
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 on
internet
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. Many peoples believe that it is good to share as much as possible
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 as scientific research and others believe that some
information
 should be kept confidential.
Information
 is important to get knowledge,
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, when I was studying I had a lot of assessments and I read many articles to present a good job. In
this
 case, more
information
 is better to learn more.
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 example is when you want to sell a product and you do not describe it as much as you can, most
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people
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 will not be interested.
Thus
,
this
 kind of
information
 is important to share as much as you can.
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 the other hand,
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some
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such
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scientific research can not be published.
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, laboratories do tests to approve some medicine and a
couple
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 months before I was invited to participate
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 a test. It was a test for a new medicine to headache and they sent me a confidential contract
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 because there are some
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 if sharing can be dangerous and too valuable. In my opinion,
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information
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such
 as academic, business, articles should be shared as long as it is correct and true to help people get more knowledge, but personal
information
, scientific research,
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information
 should be retained.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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