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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development.

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In
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 modern era,
university
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the university
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 student ratio has increased for the
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 two decades dramatically dude
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people get more
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about
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the
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higher studies
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, most
students
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 would like to go to study abroad as compared
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to their
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 own nation for many reasons.
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merits
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the merits
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 and demerits of
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 improvement for the following reasons.
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abroad education opportunities give more advantages to the
students
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 as well as the host nation. The main advantage is overseas
pupil
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pupils
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 might be gotten a better lifestyle in order to they will satisfy
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their's family needs and wants.
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,
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many developed nations bring a lot of overseas
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pupils
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 from other parts of the world
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, they can earn
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massive capital from
students
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 in order to they can use
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 money on the hoist state infrastructure developments.
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, globalisation is the main reason for
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 modern trend. Certainly,
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 trend has some demerits one possible drawback is the
students
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 face
cultural
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a cultural
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 shock when they enter a
forgien
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foreign
 and they get stress due to they miss their family and friends.
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, according to the survey said that more than 40% of international pupils affect
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 for the
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 three months after they can
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adapt
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the
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 new environment as well as culture.
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, another drawback is some person has decided to face suicide because they cannot accept and adopt the new
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atmosphere
. To conclude, certainly,
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 phenomenon has merits as well as demerits. I think
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 on the person's mindset and situation. I hope
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 trend is conducive for the
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 generation to build a
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 society.
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