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Some people believe that children of all ages should have extra responsibilities. Other believe that, outside of school, children should be free to enjoy life. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Childhood
 is period where
a
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children
 enjoy the most while learning from their surroundings. Up until the age of even, a
child
's mind is flexible
enoung
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enough
 to grasp anything present to it
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therefore
this
 period is considered to be the most crucial among others. Some
people
 advocate the
idea
 that
children
 of all ages should be aware of their responsibilities and focus on fulfilling them.
On the other hand
, some
people
 believe that
childhood
 is meant to be enjoyed and
instead
 of just focusing on fulfilling their duties, a
child
 should be allowed to enjoy
life
 freely. Knowing your duties at
you
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your
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 work or in general day to day
life
 and fulfilling them is an important skill to have in today's competitive world.
People
 who are in support of making their
children
a
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responsible
being
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beings
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 in their early
stage
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stages
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 of
lives
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life
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 want them to compete
them
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with them
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 at the highest level and be ready for all the challenges. Being responsible will not only make the
children
 more self-aware and help them to craft a better future for themselves.
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They
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The
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They
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 will learn to be more
desciplined
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disciplined
 and self-
relaint
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reliant
 and will perform every task efficiently.
For instance
, the famous personality Swami Vivekananda is a great proponent of living a disciplined
life
. From his
childhood
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 he was focused and determined
beacuse
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because
 he took charge of his responsibilities from
his
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a
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 young age.
Moreover
, a responsible
child
 would be a gift to his parents in various aspects and would make their
lives
 easier.
In contrast
, it is
also
 important to focus on enjoying your
life
 in your
childhood
 and it is the period where a human being has the least amount of dependencies and
responsibilties
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responsibilities
. No one
expect
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expects
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 them to
effcient
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efficient
 in their tasks and hold
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them
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the
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them
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responsible
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responsibility
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 for anything they do. The
idea
 of letting
children
 enjoy
the
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their
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lives
 to the fullest at their
nacent
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nascent
 stage is popular among
people
 who discourage the
idea
 of putting unnecessary pressure on their
children
. They believe in the
idea
 of free will.
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Over burdening
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Overburdening
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child
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a child
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 in his or her early stage of
life
 could have
negative
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 impact on a
child
's mind. To conclude, both the
idealogies
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ideologies
 have their pros and cons but one must maintain a balance between them while implementing
tyhem
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them
 on their
children
.
Children
 are a gift of
god
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God
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 to
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humankind
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human kind
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humankind
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. They neither should not be overwhelmed with unnecessary pressure nor should be set free enough to sabotage their
lives
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