Competitiveness is seen as a positive quality for people to have in many societies today. How does this competitiveness affect individuals? Is it a positive or negative quality?

We are now living in a high-speed developing world where
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fills with
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environment brings
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positive contribution to
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society,
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competitiveness influenced us differently and the reason why I personally consider it as a positive quality for
people
to contribute.
First
of all, the
competition
can either encourage a person or discourage him. Let’s take a student as
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example: being arranged in a competitive environment, he may opt to study actively or passively, depending on how he
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his future. If he is a positive person, he will embrace the challenges he faces, whereas if he is thinking negative, he
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be accepting the situation and do nothing constructive to make a change.
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different, according to their attitude. Though being competitive won’t be everyone ‘s choice, even in society today, personally I think it is a good quality to cultivate. For one thing,
competition
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society become modern is mainly
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it is full of individuals who
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such
spirit. Where there is
competition
, there is modernization. For another, being active is beneficial for
people
‘s well-being. A recent health report has reviewed that 80%
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people
’s diseases are originated from their negative living
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. Whether live actively, joining in various competitions, or staying where we are, the demands of schools and markets are always there. Sooner or later, you have to confront them.
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do not think avoiding it is a wise strategy. In conclusion,
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of competitiveness is
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. I strongly believe that
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of avoiding it , we should embrace it
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. only in
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a true blessing life.
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