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some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people's lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsabilities. discuss both views and give your own opinion

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One of the highly controversial issues today relates to whether the best moments in someone’s
life
 is the teenage
age
 or the
adult
age
. In
this
 essay, I am going to examine
this
 question from both points of view and
then
 give my own opinion on the matter. On one side of the
,
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 there are people who argue that the best
age
 is the
adult
 phase considerably outweighing the adolescent phase. The main reason for believing
this
 is that as an
adult
 it is possible to effectively have independence during
life
. One good illustration of
this
 in my personal
life
 is when I could choose my internship in Italy by my own choice during my master’s degree. It is
also
 possible to say that as an
adult
, to overcome challenges taste a different flavour considering there are bills to be paid, career goals to be reached and family
life
 desires.
On the other hand
, it is
also
 possible to make the opposing case. It is often argued that in ,
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 the youth is the happiest moment. People often have
this
 opinion because is the time where it happens the
first
 trials of several experiences: the
first
 kiss, the
first
 couple,
first
 job, etc. A
second
 point is that at
this
age
 there is no family or children to worry about.
On the contrary
, the family, which they are part of, usually does offer great support during these years. A particularly good example here is when they live in their parent’s house during their studies. In conclusion, I believe that both arguments have their merits. On balance,
however
, I tend to feel that the happiest moments happen during
adult
life
 due to the number of challenging objectives that exist
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this
 moment and the independence acquired at
this
 moment.
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