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More and more businesses as well individuals are choosing to communicate either professionally or socially using technology rather than being face to face.Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of using technology for communicating

#businesses #individuals #technology #face
Nowadays, most businesses and people opt
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 to communicate with each other rather than
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meeting
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This
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 paragraphs. It is a good approach to communicate online using technology.
Firstly
, it is
quick
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 and cheaper way of communicating.
For instance
, a person who attends
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a meeting
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meeting
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 on video conferencing can save time and cost to commute. Companies who organise meetings in hotels can save rent of
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 halls.
Moreover
, It is
also
 a better way to communicate an individual can convey his message directly to the receiver. To illustrate, In an online meeting, a person can communicate
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dirty
 to their subordinates.
On the other hand
, there are some drawbacks
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 online meetings.
First
, there is less interaction among employees. They are not much familiar with their co-workers. There is
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 a lack of team spirit.
Moreover
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hacker
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Efficiency
  • Convenience
  • Instant messaging
  • Video calls
  • Cost-effectiveness
  • Economical
  • Accessibility
  • Physical barriers
  • Nuanced understanding
  • Impersonal
  • Misunderstandings
  • Reliance
  • Technical failures
  • Vulnerable
  • Security breaches
  • Hacking
  • Data theft
  • Sensitive information
  • Digital communication
  • Face-to-face interactions
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