There are more new towns being built nowadays it is more important to include public parks and sports facilities than shopping centres for individual to spend their free time to .what extent do you agree or disagree ...
A matter of considerable controversy at present is the issue of developing towns should include
parks
and gaming spots instead
of shopping malls to spend leisure time. I am accord
with the Change preposition
in accord
first
notion but shopping malls are equally essential for us.
On the other hand
, parks
and sports facilities play a vital role in the development of people
. First
of all, all parks
are used by individuals for different purposes such
as morning walk
, exercise and as a picnic spot. A good park must include plants and flowers and basic exercise Fix the agreement mistake
walks
equipments
, Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
as a result
of this
people
attract toward
the Change preposition
to
parks
and spend most of their free time during meeting
with new Add an article
a meeting
people
. Additionally
, gaming facilities are including gyms and playgrounds, so for health
and well-being of Correct article usage
the health
society
it should be included in a new Add a comma
,society
built-town
.
Correct your spelling
built town
On the other hand
, to buy the
things under one roof Correct article usage
apply
people
needs shopping
Correct article usage
a shopping
center
or plazas as they are Change the spelling
centre
the
essential part of the city. Correct article usage
an
Furthermore
, supermarkets include variety
of shops at one point that Add an article
a variety
provide
Change the verb form
provides
plethora
of employment opportunities for job seekers due to Add an article
a plethora
this residents
of the town and cities have ample Change the determiner
this resident
these residents
of
choices to select jobs. Change preposition
apply
For instance
, a recent survey done
by Queensland university that due to the advancement of shopping malls plenty of Add the auxiliary verb
was done
people
receiving jobs according
their desires. Add the preposition
toaccording
Hence
, to overall
development of the city or to enrich the economy of Add an article
the overall
nations
the population of following places needs Add a comma
,nations
super stores
.
To conclude, Correct your spelling
superstores
although
parks
and sports facilities are must
to create a healthy environment, while needs of shopping hubs is a significant factor that Correct article usage
a must
need
to be addressed.Change the verb form
needs
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