There is an increasing trend around the world of married couples deciding not to have children. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for couples who decide to do this.
An increasing number of married
couples
choose to not have children
. One of the benefits is that childless married couples
can pursue their individual and career goals easily while
the main drawback is the lack of care
they will receive when they are old.
On the one hand, the flexibility to chase personal and professional goals is the main benefit that childless married couples
have. That is
to say, without any kids to take care
of, their time can be used to develop themselves, personally or professionally. As a result
, married couples
who choose to be child-free can be more contemptuous of their personal and professional lives. For example
, many married couples
, especially women, have to stop doing their jobs because they have kids.
On the other hand
, when married couples
choose to not have children
, it may be difficult for them to have the care
they need when they are old. Usually, children
will take care
of their elderly parents who do not have any more capacity to take care
of themselves. Therefore
, it is beneficial for elderly people to have children
to support their lives when they are old. For example
, many elderly people in Indonesia are taken care
of by their children
and living
with their Wrong verb form
live
children
's families.
In conclusion, the increasing trend of child-free married couples
brings advantages and disadvantages. While
this
allows many married couples
to pursue their personal and professional goals, this
also
can make it more difficult for elderly married couples
to get the proper care
they need.Submitted by aribawadzaki on
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task response
While the essay addresses both advantages and disadvantages, it can be enhanced by providing more balanced and in-depth analysis on each point. For instance, highlighting additional benefits such as financial stability and freedom for travel and hobbies. Similarly, more elaboration on the emotional and psychological impact of being childless could be added to the disadvantages.
coherence and cohesion
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introduction/conclusion present
The essay clearly introduces the main topic and provides a satisfactory conclusion that summarizes the discussion well.
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