In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it a valuable work experience, which is important for learning and taking responsibility. What is your opinion

In some nations,

children

are encouraged to

work

for

money

in their early

years

. Some

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this

statement. Whilst,

other

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argue that

this

could be a relevant

work

experience for

children

.

Also

,

this

could help them to be a responsible

person

. I believe that

children

could learn to be accountable and could know the importance of

money

.

Firstly

, young learners could understand the importance of responsibility.

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because

this

extremely essential skill grooms the

children

to be a mature

person

in the future.

Moreover

,

this

imperative quality is required everywhere in today's world.

Also

, the New generation learns to handle and carry the necessary

work

for themselves.

For example

, in India, most

children

are enrolled in pre-mature stage learning schools. While they are in those institutions, they learn various qualities which help them to achieve great heights in

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coming

years

Secondly

, young ones learn the importance of

money

and

also

know how to manage it for themselves. As when a

person

is in adult

years

they already are well-prepared to handle their financial condition.

As a result

, they emerge as

person

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who is successful financially.

For instance

, in the region of Mumbai. Several growing

children

are engaged in a paid social working activities where their salary is pre-decided. While they receive their salary they are taught to manage the

money

. In conclusion, qualities relating to accountability and responsibility are learned if

children

are influenced to join paid

work

in their initial

years

. I

also

believe that young ones learn to save and spend their funds. As these are important to have a good and sensational life.