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some people think that space exploration is waste of resources while others thinks that it is essential for mankind to explore the universe in which we live discuss both sides and give your opinion

#people #space #exploration #waste #resources #mankind #universe
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Man has always been curious about the Universe and the way it works. To understand these
space
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 missions have been carried for a long time.The number of
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 missions that are being carried out by various countries
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 increasing every day.Some
people
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 are of the opinion that, the huge amount of resources
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 are being used for
such
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 missions , should be utilized for the development of
people
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 here on
Earth
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.I am of the opinion that, while exploring
space
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 is essential , improving human
life
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 is more essential and
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 should be given more importance. The following paragraphs will discuss both sides in detail and justify my opinion.
Space
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 exploration is not a cheap affair. Every year, millions of dollars and a vast amount of materials are spent on it.
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, it is an undeniable fact that spending all of these resources on
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 projects does not make sense
,
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 when several
people
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 out there are dying because of hunger and thirst.
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, even today in Africa, more than half of the population is below the poverty line and had no access to basic facilities.
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 money
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 should
instead
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 be invested in providing basic facilities to each and every person living on
this
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 planet, and in improving the standard of living of
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 in underdeveloped nations.It is our primary duty to uplift the poor and underprivileged
people
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, as well as to use resources for eradicating poverty and hunger.
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, it is true that exploring
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outer
space
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 has benefitted us in many ways. The invention of several objects that we use in our daily
life
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 was possible because of it. It
also
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 helps us to understand more about our planet
Earth
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 and how
life
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 evolved on it. Various technologies that we use today, came into being because of
this
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.
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, take the example of GPS. It uses satellites stationed outside
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 to track our position.It is fair to say that
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 exploration has made our
life
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 on
Earth
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 easier. To conclude, even though carrying out
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 projects has many advantages, it should not be given more importance than improving the lives of
people
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 on
Earth
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • astronomical costs
  • earthbound issues
  • tangible benefits
  • technological spin-offs
  • innovation
  • long-term investment
  • habitability
  • interplanetary travel
  • sustainable exploration
  • spacefaring nations
  • international collaboration
  • deep space
  • the final frontier
  • cosmic perspective
  • frontiers of science
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