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Some people think that uniform at school is unnecessary and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #uniform #school
Nowadays, most
students
 should wear only
uniforms
 at
school
 as a compulsory rule.
However
, some people argue that wearing
uniforms
 is not pivotal and even should be prohibited. I personally disagree with the opinion and think that
uniforms
 have more merits than drawbacks for
students
. On the one hand, some people reckon that
school
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schools
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 should abolish
school
uniforms
 and liberalize the dress code. It is a matter of freedom that every
children
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 should get.
For example
, when they are prevented from wearing casual clothing with
new
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trend
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 and get
penulties
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penalties
, they would stress out and think of the
school
 as a jail that keeps them with force.Another reason why the uniform is useless for
students
 is
inconvenience
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 and
high
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 price of it.
In particular
, most girls who focus on their
study
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 consider
uniforms
 uncomfortable due to skirts.
Besides
, the clothes are a burden for
students
 struggling in poverty. It is expensive and most of
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 for their living expenses.
Therefore
, the uniform is not
essential
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 thing for
students
.
On the other hand
, others believe that
uniforms
 should keep continually because of positive effects for
students
.
First
 of all,
students
 can feel a sense of belonging when
puting
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putting
 on it. It can help them concentrate on their study and prevent
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bad
behaviors
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such
 as smoking.
In addition
, the community, when they wear
same
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 clothes, make
students
 feel comfortable and
familar
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familiar
 with their class. It can be beneficial to make new classmates and adopt
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 environment for them.
Besides
, It can be helpful to minimalize the difference in socio-economic status between peers. And, they don't need to worry
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 they wear every day. In conclusion, as I mentioned above,
although
 there are some disadvantages that
students
 should accept, I believe that schools should maintain the policy that
students
 put on
school
uniforms
 at
school
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • uniform
  • unnecessary
  • banned
  • promotes
  • equality
  • peer pressure
  • fosters
  • sense of belonging
  • pride
  • prepares
  • future
  • maintain
  • discipline
  • order
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