IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7.5

Some people say that modern innovations bring a lot more problems than benefits ? Do you agree or disagree ?

#people #innovations
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Today, technological innovations have become an essential part of our daily life. We are dependent on them for carrying out several tasks , both trivial and important ones. While some people are of the opinion that these inventions have benefitted is in many ways, others believe that they have given rise to several issues which cannot be ignored. In my opinion, the advantages of these things definitely outweigh their disadvantages. It is an undeniable fact that our life would not be the same without the various technologies and machines that we use today. They have made our lives easier and more convenient in many ways.
For example
Linking Words
,these days tasks like washing clothes and dishes are carried out by washing machines and dishwashers respectively. And since we don't need to do them manually , it saves us a lot of time which can be utilised for completing other important things.Modern inventions like mobiles phones, tablets, etc. have reduced the distance between people by allowing them to stay in contact with each other irrespective of the geographical distance between them.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, just like every coin has two sides, these new-age innovations have brought in several problems with them.One major problem is that of the huge amount of electronic waste they
generatedThe
Correct your spelling
generated
 amount of e-waste generated has risen greatly in the
last
Linking Words
 few decades and is causing damage to the environment .
For instance
Linking Words
, electronics
such
Linking Words
 as mobile phones contain several toxic metals, which when
disposed
Add the preposition
ofdisposed
show examples
 in landfills, contaminate the soil and water in the surrounding area.Another problem is that it has made us lazy and dependent on machines . So if a machine breaks down , we become irritated and our work stops. To conclude, it is true that modern inventions have negative consequences.
However
Linking Words
, they can be handled effectively through effort and handwork.
Hence
Linking Words
, we should not ignore the benefits that the latest innovations have provided us with.
Submitted by yashashrikolalle on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: