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Many people finde it hard to balance their work with other parts of their lives. why do you think that is? how can this problem be overcome?

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A significant number of individuals struggle to maintain a healthy work-life balance
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 long and demanding
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.
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 essay will discuss how setting firm boundaries by only working within official
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 and with workplaces offering more flexible arrangements are the most effective solutions. Working long shifts disrupts a person's ability to balance their work and their life.
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 is because most employees nowadays spend the majority of their day working or commuting for five to six days per week, leaving them with limited time for personal or social activities.
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, many have become too exhausted for self-care, hobbies, or even basic relaxation.
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, a study in Saudi Arabia found that 70% of active participants in sports in Riyadh were either students or those working fewer than seven
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 daily. One way to tackle
this
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 problem is for individuals to set firm boundaries by finishing work at the official end of the day. If they leave promptly and avoid taking tasks home, they will have more time for themselves and their families.
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 motivates employers to set realistic deadlines and ensure they hire enough staff,
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 balancing the workers' lives. Another solution is adopting flexible policies,
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 as remote work, so that employees focus on completing tasks rather than being tied to specific
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. In Saudi Arabia, many businesses now include remote days, giving workers more time for family and personal interests. In conclusion, labouring long working
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 disrupts an individual's life balance;
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, setting solid boundaries and implementing flexible regulations can significantly alleviate
this
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 issue.

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task response
For task response: answer both parts a bit more fully. You explain why this happens well, but you can add one more cause, like high living cost or phone use after work.
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For task response: make your solutions more direct. Say clearly how each solution solves the problem in daily life.
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For task response: your example is good, but one more short and clear example would make your ideas stronger.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: your essay is easy to follow, but some sentences are long. Use shorter sentences sometimes to make your meaning even clearer.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: connect ideas more smoothly in a few places. For example, after the problem, show more clearly why the solution matches it.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: be careful with small joining words and spacing, so the flow looks clean and natural.
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For task response: you answer both questions in the task, so your essay stays on topic.
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For task response: your ideas are clear and practical, especially about work hours and flexible work.
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For task response: you use a relevant example from Saudi Arabia, and this helps support your point.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: your essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: each paragraph has one main idea, which makes the essay easy to read.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: words like 'As a result' and 'Another solution' help guide the reader.
Your opinion

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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