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Nowadays people have greater access to fast food Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Unequivocally fast
food
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 has become an important part of most people's lives. The ones who live in cities with
fast paced
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 lives cannot survive without fast
food
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 because it offers
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time saving
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time-saving
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 and
cost effective
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cost-effective
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advantages
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. At the same
time
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, fast
food
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 deteriorates
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health
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 of its consumer, as well as its everyday
consumption
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 will make a person forgetful about cooking the
convetional
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conventional
food
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This
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fast
food
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. When we think about
advantages
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 of the fast
food
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, the
first
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 and foremost one is
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time saving
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. The
food
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do
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 not take much
time
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 to prepare like the conventional
food
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, as well as it is available in most restaurants of the country.
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time
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of
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 its consumer.
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, many working professionals do not get enough
time
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 to prepare
food
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 by themselves.
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, they prefer
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fast
food
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 in their working days.
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, the
food
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 is not so expensive as
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conventional
food
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. Raw materials which are being used in making
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fast
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fast-food
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food
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 are
comparitively
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comparatively
 cheaper. Due to that, the overall price is quite affordable for the majority of the people.
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, fast
food
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 cannot be the complete substitution of
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conventional
food
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 due to certain disadvantages. The major disadvantage is its adverse effects on the consumer's
health
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. If someone continues to eat
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fast
food
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everyday
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, they would end up having
health
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 issues like diabetes, obesity and blood pressure. Sometimes these
health
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 problems are life
threatning
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threatening
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, if people were to habituate
for
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to
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 fast
food
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, there would be high chances that they would forget how to make the conventional
food
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 items in the near future. We have a great example of the younger generation, many of them do not know how to cook
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traditional
food
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. In conclusion, after observing
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fast
food
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, I certainly believe that there are serious disadvantages than
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advantages
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.
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, the
advantages
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 do not outweigh the disadvantages in any circumstances.
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