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Some people believe that travelling alone is the best way to experience a country or a culture. Others feel that it is better to travel with people you know. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some
people
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 consider that travelling alone should be the preferable way to learn a country’s background, language or culture. Others feel that
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 should travel with his
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her known ones. In
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 of
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 and I will emphasize my perspectives regarding
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 matter.
To begin
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 has the freedom to make his
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her decisions.
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 means
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 can book a ticket, choose a place and make his
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her stay comfortable.
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, there will be no disturbance or annoyance of
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 to worry about. Another concern is that
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 is less likely to feel stressed out.
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 is because when
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 is with
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, he
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she is more likely to listen to their thoughts and opinions.
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,
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 is unable to make them happy with his
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her decisions
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.
People
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 who like solo
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 do not want
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.
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, they do not want to feel the burden when travelling. Travelling alone means
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 can easily blend in with locals which will give license to barter. That said, travelling alone does not automatically mean that
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 is completely safe from hustlers. Another consideration is meeting new interesting
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. When
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 travels with others, he
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she typically
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 together.
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,
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 is less likely to wander away from his
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her group.
On the other hand
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, travelling with friends and family can be an exciting feeling.
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 means we can make plans and arrangements before travelling. Packing up the luggage and getting ready for a flight
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 of the best feelings to be remembered. We can
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 gather information about where and which places to visit.
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 there will be conflicts and
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 among the family members, we can still enjoy the moment with them. We are less likely to get lost in the middle of our trip since we stick together wherever we go.
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 ensures the benefits of travelling with our loved ones. To conclude, I support the fact of travelling with different groups of
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.
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 before any factors or considerations.
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,
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 who choose to travel alone should be aware of his
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her circumstances.
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