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In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is a known fact that only small-scale of an individual is earning high wages in many nations. There are those who argued that
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 situation is beneficial for the citizens and government while others suggest that limitations in the wage gap should be applied by authorities.
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 and foremost, it is undeniable that some professions are earning significantly high incomes than others. As football players, politicians, actresses and actors, are able to live a luxurious lifestyle while other vocations have to accept being in a middle class
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 as doctors, teachers, nurses and polices. It is obvious that popularity and recognition by the public change how much these
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 earn and they can use
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 fame for the citizens' sake by helping them or representing them in an international area.
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, Lady Diana was the most known royal family member throughout the world and she tried to use her fame to support
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 who suffer from AIDS.
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, it is probably true to say that occupations which contribute to the society most are public vocations
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 as doctors, teachers and polices. Undoubtedly on many occasions our lives and future depends on not only their performance but
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 their well-being. Many nations agree that these professions should be given more attention and their salaries should be protected by the government.
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 Spanish government faced many discussions regarding the low wages of nurses during the pandemic. Million-dollar football players were criticised for their lifestyles while nurses only gaining 1500 Euro per month and
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 cause unwillingness to be in a health care system within the
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 generations. In conclusion, undeniably there are small privileged
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 who earn much more money than others
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 these
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 can contribute the society when they use their repute. But I believe that the occupations which touch peoples life more should be prioritised and protect by authorities strongly.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • incentivize
  • discrepancy
  • inequality
  • social cohesion
  • equitable distribution
  • wealth concentration
  • talent retention
  • global competitiveness
  • social unrest
  • innovate
  • government intervention
  • salary cap
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