t is sometimes said that people should be encouraged to get married before they turn 30, as this is best both for the individual and for the society. Do you agree or disagree?
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, many young partners do not think much about the responsibility and difficulties when they create the family. Especially, if this
decision was made under the influence of various factors such
as the opinion of parents, friends, beautiful articles in magazines, social networks. The married life change their lifestyle, hobbies and rest. The household chores and parenting are become
a priority. In turn, all these points lead to disagreement and misunderstandings in the relationships. The social studies and psychological surveys in Russia show that the number of divorces between citizens under the age of thirty has increased by 35 Change to the active voice
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, another important reason to confirm my position is financial instability, since folks do not have a high paying job
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, despite the support of the state to the new families, it is sometimes not enough to purchase housing and people take the loans. For instance
, according to the bank of Russia, the share of borrowers has raised among residents before thirty years .
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
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- thirdly
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- moreover
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- for example
- for instance
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- however
- although
- even though
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