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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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A piece of important
information
 I formation has always helped people to achieve their specific goals regarding their projects. Some people think that sharing all crucial
information
 would be a great deal to get success
however
, other things that not every
information
 should be disclosed but should be under the box. After discussing both views
i
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 will give my opinion on one of them. Business and academic
information
 are usually are based on procedures that are utilised to complete tasks regarding accounts and education. Both are essential to be shared with respective members because
this
 database would assist them to make progress in their careers. On the other ,hand sharing research
information
 would help them to complete projects and methods to deal with search projects, it is good to share all
this
information
 because by
this
 a
person
 is not only able to work but
also
 wider his thoughts and ideas to tackle problems and have great experience for his entire life.
Although
 without
this
information
 a
person
 can face problems and sometimes
this
 causes end his interesting fields. While sharing all kinds of
information
 isn’t a good option because
this
 would lead to several problems
although
 sharing
information
 should be limited to those who are empowered to have it. If an intelligent agency having a suspect
then
such
information
 should be under officials
otherwise
,
this
 would assist
such
person
 to escape from the investigation. While sharing all kinds of
information
 could be a reason for disclosing important data, it
also
 creates wider chances for imitation of private creation to be stolen.
Therefore
 is necessary that expertise should be limited to
person
 as well as in departments. In closing, my vision is clear that sharing should be limited because
this
 would always keep your views and ideas to you ,not to others
otherwise
this
 may be utilised wrongly or against you without your permission.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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