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Some museums and art galleries charge admission fees, while others have free entry. Do you think the advantages of charging for admission outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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As a matter of fact, in
this
 day and age,more museums and art galleries prefer to get a fee but the others don't realize
this
 process. I am of the opinion that there are some advantages and disadvantages
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 matter. Let us take a look at the
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.One of them,in fact,both the younger and the mature don't go so places.Because, nowadays,social media goes global.People are able to see that what they dream,
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 if anybody desires to obvious history things,they will search on Google.The younger like to play games on the phones or real life,
in addition
 watching different programs on TV and some negative activities.I believe that if many museums or art galleries become free,more people will desire to go there.I must admit that some people admire moneyless activities.
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