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universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe that equal numbers of
men
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 and
women
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 should be attracted to the same subject by
universities
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 .
While
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 I agree with
this
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 assertion, I believe some
subjects
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 are not appropriate for a particular gender. On the one hand, in my opinion, equal numbers of
men
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 and
women
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 should be accepted in some
subjects
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 .
Firstly
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 , there are a lot of genius people
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 did not have a chance to get academic certification from
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due to
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 a lack of equality in entering
universities
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 .
Also
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 , nowadays, many doctors and engineers are female, and they are so successful even more than males. So, if females have the same
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, they will show their abilities.
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 , society has accepted that
men
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 and
women
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 must have the same
right
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 in many areas.
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 , nowadays, lots of
men
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 stay at home and do
households
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, and their wives are working out of the home.
On the other hand
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 , I believe that some jobs are more appropriate for
women
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 like nursing.
This
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the
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job requires a lot of patience and accuracy, and
i
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think females deserve to have
this
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 job compared to males.
By contrast
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 , some
subjects
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 like civil engineering
is
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 so exhausting and difficult and need a strong physique, and of course,
men
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 are more appropriate for
this
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 job. In conclusion, I agree that equal numbers of
men
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 and
women
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 should be entered
some
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subjects
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 by
universities
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 , but several
subjects
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that
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is
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 not for either man and
women
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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