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"Prison is the only truly effective form of punishment, because it separates criminals form society." To what extent do you support this view? You should give reasons for your answer, and include ideas and examples from your own knowledge and experience

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It is compelling when it comes to the two opinions related to the effect of
prison
. Overall, the benefits of
prison
 outweigh the disadvantages, which means the system should be maintained rather than stopped. On one hand, it is somehow understandable that some
people
 highlight the drawbacks of the facility for criminals. From their perspective, the time of the
people
 who committed a crime could be wasted without making any progress if they should be behind the bar.
For example
, rather than being educated to be an expert to be an ethically better person or doing more productive actions outside, their social attitude might be passively contracted in the cell.
On the other hand
,
however
, there are several benefits of making criminals be in the
prison
.
Firstly
, by making their habitat limited, we can assure the victims of the crime.
This
 is because ,in the victim's view, it would be much beneficial once they know that those who committed a crime can't frighten them for the purpose of revenge due to their time in
prison
 for a while.
Secondly
, the time behind the bar could be considered a
second
 chance for them. Even though their range of behaviour would be controlled and regulated, there are some possibilities that they could revise their behaviour and attitude toward society. By conducting
this
, we can expect that the
people
 who misbehaved in the past could be new
people
 who suit the justice well in the end. To sum up, since there are more benefits than drawbacks, it should be considered positively to keep the
prison
 penalty.
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