Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and ive your opinion.

Advertising is when
businesses
use
numerous strategies to attract
customers
to buy their
products
. It is argued by some
people
that advertising is very successful in influencing consumers on their purchases.
On the other hand
, some other
people
believe that advertising does not affect individuals anymore because it is very common. I believe that innovative advertising will be successful in attracting
people
by
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buy
business
goods. Traditional advertising methods
such
as television and radio advertisements, newspaper adverts, posters and banners
does
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not capture the interest of
people
anymore. These methods have been used for years by
businesses
hence
it is not extremely successful because
people
already know what it is about and what the advertisement will depict.
However
,
businesses
use
these strategies anyway to remind the
customers
about their
products
.
On the other hand
, some argue that advertising is
exceeding
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successful in attracting
customers
to
businesses
.
This
could be true in certain scenarios where the
business
is bringing up trendy, innovative, creative ideas of marketing to grab
customers
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customers'
customer's
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attention and unconsciously persuade them to buy
products
.
Increasing
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number of
businesses
now
use
innovative advertising strategies that persuade
customers
to purchase
products
. A good example is social media advertising where
businesses
use
statistical data of a person’s social media usage and recommend
products
suitable for their specific needs. In my opinion, in today’s dynamic
business
arena, it is not easy for
business
organizations to become extremely successful by doing traditional marketing.
Customers
would consider it to be very common and eventually neglect it if the
business
is not
being
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up to date with changing markets. I believe
,
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businesses
are required to find better and effective methods of advertising that could generate loyal
customers
to any
business
entity.
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Coherence & Cohesion
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Task Achievement
Try to provide more specific examples to support your arguments, especially when discussing the effectiveness of innovative advertising strategies.
Introduction & Conclusion Present
Your essay provides a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing your discussion.
Complete Response
You've successfully discussed both views on the role of advertising, showcasing your ability to engage with multiple perspectives.
Logical Structure
Your organization of ideas is logical, making your essay easy to follow and understand.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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