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Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad. Discuss both views and state your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In today's technological environment, few
people
 think that organizing an international
sports
event
 is programmatically not a valuable idea for the
country
,
however
, others think, it would be a great initiative to host an international
event
 in the
country
. Here, I will be discussing both views and share my opinion for the same. The international
sports
event
 will help the
country
 to gain name and recognition worldwide, with international
sports
such
 as Olympics, T20, and other events are marking their steps all over the world.
However
, it would
also
 initiate the incoming of
money
 into the
country
; as the viewers would be spending
money
 to watch their lovable
sports
.
Likewise
, Olympics was held in India two years back, which counted 10000 viewers in the stadium of Delhi.
However
, few
people
 think that apart from spending a lot of
money
 in organizing a
sports
event
, they could easily invest it in
country
 and children growth.
Additionally
, the government can arrange food and shelter for poor
people
, who are not eligible to have food even for a single meal.
People
 are dying due to scarcity of resources, even water is not at all available in few urban areas, which inflated the death rate in an aggressive manner in our
country
. In nutshell, I would suggest that government should make a budget in a way that, they would be able to spend a good percentage of
money
 to make schools for the needy for free, including meals for at least two times a day, parallelly with investing in
country
's recognition i.e. making roads in the countryside to communicate
people
 with relief.
This
 initiative would help them to grow physically and mentally.
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