Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In contemporary life, a dominant concern revolves around an increasing opinion that a huge amount of choices are given
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people
. In my point of view, I totally agree with that idea because of
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reasons that I outline below. Viewed from many different
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, it is obviously true that
people
are given an overwhelming majority of decisions to make as the result of development in online coverage.
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, owing to
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of
Internet
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, distance communication takes less time- consumption, which leads users to be able to talk to each other in a more convenient and faster way. Taking a recruitment process as an excellent example, an applicant may find several recruiting posted by a recruiter on online-based platforms and they are likely to get access to each other immediately. In conclusion, the improvement of
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transform
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the way
people
interact with each other, which results in many choices needed to be chosen by
people
.
On the other hand
, due to globalization,
people
may integrate into many international
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. To explain, lucrative opportunities are given to
people
to choose how they live, what to do and where to work, etc.
For example
, a student majoring in IT may become an English teacher because of his fluent English ability.
Finally
, when an ambitious dream you chose is not suitable for
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current life, you have to plan a new way to makes
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meet. To sum up, it is completely true that
people
nowadays have to face
with
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making too many decisions
on
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life due to the impact of
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and global integration, especially the young
people
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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