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You and your family are living in rented accommodation in an English-speaking country. You are not satisfied with the condition of some of the furniture. Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter - Introduce yourself - explain what is wrong with the furniture - say what action you would like the landlord to take.

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Dear Sir, I am Arthur, residing in the leased flat at 27 New Karakum. I am writing to convey my discontent with the furniture that was given. Since my move on the 27th of October 2024 to flat A on the 5th floor, there have been continuous complaints. I believe the tearing of the living room chairs is
due to
 the frequent use they have experienced. I can see that it has recently undergone renovations.
Nevertheless
, it was not completed correctly.
Additionally
, there is a dining chair with a broken leg that requires immediate repair. Could you please switch out the furniture in the living room? As the chairs have already been refurbished, it would not be a good idea to try to fix the materials on them.
Furthermore
, the dining chair can be repaired by simply reattaching the leg with the help of a carpenter. We appreciate your thoughtfulness. Yours faithfully, Arthur
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task achievement
The introduction to the letter is clear, but providing more specific details about the flat and your family might enhance the reader's understanding of your situation.
coherence cohesion
To improve coherence, consider using clearer transitions between the issues with the furniture and the actions you want the landlord to take.
task achievement
The letter maintains a polite and respectful tone throughout, which is very suitable for this type of correspondence.
coherence cohesion
The letter is well-structured with an introduction, explanation of the problems, and a request for action, ensuring clarity and purpose.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Rented accommodation
  • Tenancy
  • Malfunctioning
  • Worn-out
  • Broken
  • Inconvenience
  • Repair or replace
  • Urgency
  • Comfort
  • Safety
  • Budget
  • Specific property
  • Immediate action
  • Inadequate condition
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