Some people say that sports play an important role in society. Others, however, think that it is nothing more than a leisure activity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Sport
activities are just happy for some Change the noun form
Sports
people
while being highly appreciated as an important social contribuile
. in my Correct your spelling
contribute
contribution
contributor
opinion
both arguments are reasonable but the latter is more convincing.
Add a comma
,opinion
To begin
with,Add an article
the
sport
surely have
entertaining values for some Change the verb form
has
people
, but just that. many researches
have provided Change the wording
types of research
pieces of research
kinds of research
evidences
that playing Change the wording
evidence
pieces of evidence
shreds of evidence
sport
help individuals release stress and ameliorate their emotional situation.In fact
a winning moment in a competition means satisfaction and Add a comma
,fact
sense
of achievement. Correct article usage
a sense
Besides
, outdoor games assist participants to make new social relationship
and expand their friendship circle. Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
however
Add a comma
,however
sport
may not have a priority in the timetable of busy people
they can skip an exercise and spend time on more important duties, such
as an exam at school or a meeting at work.
Secondly
sportive activities play an indispensable role for several Add a comma
,Secondly
people
and also
contribute important values to a nation is economy and culture. On the one hand, there are more and more sport
players deciding to become professional athletes and earn their living through Change the noun form
sports
sport
Change the noun form
sports
career
. In reality, A good football player of millions of dollars per year. Fix the agreement mistake
careers
Moreover
, they found start-up business
and provide services like training youngsters who have talent in the field.
Fix the agreement mistake
businesses
Therefore
, sports not only ensureCorrect article usage
the
also
share a large part in
Change preposition
of
national
budget. Add an article
the national
On the other hand
, sportive games have played an important role in establishing diplomatic relationship
internationally. Through organising physical activities together, Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
Add an article
the government
government
of different countries have chances to reinforce their political Fix the agreement mistake
governments
relationship
and citizens could also
approach and exchange with other culture
. Fix the agreement mistake
cultures
For
example
the largest Add a comma
,example
sport
game in the world, Change the noun form
sports
Olympic
, is Correct your spelling
Olympics
an
evidence of the close Correct article usage
apply
relationship
and peace situation among countries around five continents.
in conclusion,Add an article
the
sport
may be a Leisure activity for a group of citizens but it is also
an irreplaceable factor for society with its economic values and incentives for international cooperation.Submitted by Thanh xuân on
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