Some people say that sports play an important role in society. Others, however, think that it is nothing more than a leisure activity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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activities are just happy for some
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while being highly appreciated as an important social
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. in my
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both arguments are reasonable but the latter is more convincing.
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surely
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entertaining values for some
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, but just that. many
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have provided
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that playing
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help individuals release stress and ameliorate their emotional situation.In
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a winning moment in a competition means satisfaction and
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of achievement.
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, outdoor games assist participants to make new social
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relationship
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and expand their friendship circle.
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however
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sport
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may not have a priority in the timetable of busy
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they can skip an exercise and spend time on more important duties,
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as an exam at school or a meeting at work.
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sportive activities play an indispensable role for several
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and
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contribute important values to a nation is economy and culture. On the one hand, there are more and more
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players deciding to become professional athletes and earn their living through
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sport
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career
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. In reality, A good football player of millions of dollars per year.
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, they found start-up
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businesses
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and provide services like training youngsters who have talent in the field.
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, sports not only ensure
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financial earnings of individuals but
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share a large part
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national
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budget.
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, sportive games have played an important role in establishing diplomatic
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relationship
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internationally. Through organising physical activities together,
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the government
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government
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governments
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of different countries have chances to reinforce their political
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and citizens could
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approach and exchange with other
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cultures
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.
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example
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the largest
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sport
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game in the world,
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, is
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evidence of the close
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and peace situation among countries around five continents. in conclusion,
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sport
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may be a Leisure activity for a group of citizens but it is
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an irreplaceable factor for society with its economic values and incentives for international cooperation.
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