some people believe that zoos where animals are kept in a man-made environment should no longer exist in the 21st century.Do you agree or disagree ?
Some people assert that
animals
in zoos where they Use synonyms
kept
in Add a missing verb
are kept
prosthetic
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a prosthetic
environment
should disappear in the 21 st century.I Fix the agreement mistake
environments
agrees
with Change the verb form
agree
this
statement because Linking Words
animals
have to get freedom and Use synonyms
man-made
environment Correct article usage
a man-made
not
suitable for them.In Add a missing verb
is not
this
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,essay
i
will Change the capitalization
I
expain
why Correct your spelling
explain
this
an inappropriate.
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Firstly
,Linking Words
everyones
love their freedom in life. Correct your spelling
everyone's
everyone
Animals
Use synonyms
are belong
to natural places.Where they can feel free and hunt their Change the verb form
belong
foods
.Fix the agreement mistake
food
In addition
,they are not caught in Linking Words
Add an article
a cage
the cage
cage
or in Fix the agreement mistake
cages
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a place
the place
place
where there are Fix the agreement mistake
places
planty
of humans are living like metro cities.In spite of Correct your spelling
plenty
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this
they do not feel comfortable and have Add a comma
,this
limitied
space for them.Because of that Correct your spelling
limited
reasons
,sometimes the Fix the agreement mistake
reason
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before the time.Change to the active voice
died
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largest
zoos Correct article usage
the largest
of
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in
america
100 Change the capitalization
America
of
birds were died due to Change preposition
apply
weather
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the weather
conditon
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condition
conditions
of
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in
polluted
city.Even in Add an article
a polluted
this
growing technological world , the Linking Words
readiation
of Correct your spelling
radiation
high frequency
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high-frequency
network
impacted Fix the agreement mistake
networks
harmful
effect on birds.
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a harmful
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this
recent time very large amount of species are Linking Words
gonig
to Correct your spelling
going
exitiction
. More likely due to they were Correct your spelling
extinction
perison
in Correct your spelling
person
cage
.the best way to save endangered species is by Add an article
a cage
the cage
protecteing
them in natural habitats.Correct your spelling
protecting
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animals
with the aim of making money.With help of Use synonyms
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,them
them
people get Correct your spelling
the
high
amount of cash.To make customers happy the train the Add an article
a high
animals
.many company attracted by Use synonyms
this
idea of marketing of their product.Linking Words
For example
, 20 % in television adverting they use the Linking Words
animals
like dogs ,lion and different types of birds.
In conclusion, each and every animal on earth like their freedom,Use synonyms
although
Linking Words
Correct your spelling
they
the
are not suitable to live in mad made places.So we should not Correct your spelling
they
kept
them in Change the verb form
keep
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the zoo
a zoo
zoo
.Fix the agreement mistake
zoos
zoo
must Fix the agreement mistake
Zoos
be replace
by jungles and natural habitats.Change the verb form
be replaced
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