Your friend recently moved to a new home and you would like to give him a present for the house. Write a letter to your friend

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Dear Manish, I was very happy to hear that you have bought a new
house
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in Mohali. Unfortunately, I will not be able to visit you for another three months as my company is sending me for a
ceritificate
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course
to
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the
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apply

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Canada. I have bought a set of 3 HD
cameras
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for your new home, which I will be shipping by FedEx courier service. I really wanted to buy something useful for your new home and as
ther
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are too many choices these days in the market, I was very confused.
Then
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my mother suggested
me
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to
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gift you these surveillance
cameras
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. These are three
cameras
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and you can get them installed in different areas of
tour
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home so that all sides are covered. These have the installation box and a manual with full instructions, so any electrician can do the fittings. Nowadays, crime is on the rise and
such
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security measures have become a need of every household. In our
street
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almost every
house
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has these
cameras
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installed and so these act as
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deterrent
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for potential criminals. I will be shipping them today itself, so you will be getting them within a day or two. Once again congratulating you on buying a bee
house
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and may
this
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house
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bring a lot of happiness
in
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your life. Yours lovingly, Bhavneet Singh

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