Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Many parents, who decide to send their children to private
school
, think that
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should not be
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compulsory to afford
taxes
, which support the state education system. I strongly disagree with
this
statement because there are many advantages to pay
taxes
.
Firstly
, how the
taxes
can help schools develop is that they are spent on a comfortable building, and they can be
funddation
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foundation
to send their
student
to study
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,
besides
; the private
school
need to more
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facility
such
as
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library, where support
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pupil
pupils
to pay more attention, finesses, high technological computers and others than normal schools to entertain
student
to
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after they have finished their classes because they have to live and stay with their
school
entire
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week
weekend
or month.
Furthermore
, the
student
might be able to pull more potential than normal schools.
However
, the possibility of people, who do not decide to pay
taxes
, because if
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of
school
spent money on the negative way
such
as
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bigger sing, it will not help anything, the
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pupil
pupils
might not be able to use some new building, where
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built because
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domination
demand action
of teachers. To conclude, I strongly disagree with
this
statement because the
taxes
can support a lot of
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, which is necessary for
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a student
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student
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such
as
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foundation
, or larger building.
However
, the parents should examine what money will
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on.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tax exemption
  • public education
  • private schools
  • collective responsibility
  • societal welfare
  • equitable access
  • financial burden
  • social cohesion
  • tax credits
  • vouchers
  • subsidies
  • state-funded
  • socioeconomic disparities
  • public vs. private sector
  • quality of education
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