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Topic: People now have the freedom to work and live anywhere in the world due to the development of communication technology and transportation. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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People have their own choice of living. Nowadays, most
of
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the
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people have access to live and work in different parts of the world. As there are more prominent ways to travel and communicate with each other. In my opinion, staying
in
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abroad makes
life
more
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easier and comfortable with minor cultural differences.
This
 essay will discuss both pros and cons in ensuring paragraphs and
also
 include my personal opinion. To commence,
First
 of all, one of the main
advantage
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 of living
in
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abroad is developing language skills and different
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lifestyles
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life styles
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lifestyles
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. What I mean by
this
 is whoever travel to states have more access to communicate and work with people who speak
local
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 language.
In addition
, it makes
life
 more comfortable than living in the native place,
this
 is because as there are more
convinent
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convenient
 ways of transportation which they can travel easily to anywhere in the world.
For example
, most of the Indians prefer to live in
United
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states
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 for work, study and business to lead a luxuries time. In my point of view, selecting a good
life
 makes future
generation
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 better. On the other side, there are few drawbacks which
involves
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in
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leaving their own country.
However
,
this
 will lead to missing
of
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childhood memories, culture and even end up
loosing
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 extended
relation
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 in family.
Furthermore
, those
whoever
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 settled in states might
endup
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end up
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loosing
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the
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 native culture.
For instance
, most of the
punjabi's
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Punjabis
Punjabi's
Punjab's
 move
to
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abroad for business and get busy with it, as well as there is no chance to move back to their home country as they may
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loose
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 nationality. To sum up, having a successful
life
 for the individual choice with having better communication skills and transportation.
Although
 there are some negatives involved in it, the
advantges
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advantages
 of living and working in foreign countries
wins
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 the
otherside
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other side
.
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