People these days watch TV, films and other programmes alone rather than with other people. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages

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ages, cinema and
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have been a prodigious source of entertainment. Many experts debate that whether watching these alone at home is
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or not. Personally, I am not in favour of
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trend prevailing in society these days and
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with, the major advantage that many people see is
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convenience. Individuals these days barely have time to spend with their families and friends and cannot adjust their schedule with
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to relish these entertainment sources and
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, watch these alone as per their timelines.
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, these days most of the
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shows are in the category of adult content because of which they feel comfortable while watching alone.
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, most of the series
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that now release on
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are designated as
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and parents cannot watch them with their kids.
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, It seems beneficial to enjoy these series
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with complete peace of mind rather than being ashamed of the scenes in front of others.
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, one of the discernible disadvantages of watching
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alone is that people
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it and eventually, lose their social connections. They tend to become reticent and gets trapped in their own ivory tower.
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, their personality growth is decimated and, sometimes, they even refrain from sharing their problems
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their family or friends. It can be exemplified by the recent incident where a teenager used to spend long hours
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watching movies alone, and got into depression due to
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world of
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programmes and thereby, developed suicidal
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with the same line of thinking is that it can have a deterrent effect on students as they tend to lose their emotional connection with family and always try to live in isolation.
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family is a result of
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cases are ever-present and are treacherous. In conclusion, despite
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the fact that the content of shows has changed substantially, it is imperative to watch them with
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to enjoy and make
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bond with friends. I reckon that disadvantages
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more severe repercussions than
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advantages and
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one should socialise with people while relishing these sources of entertainment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • personal freedom
  • compromise
  • negotiate
  • viewing preferences
  • enhanced focus
  • immerse
  • understanding
  • appreciation
  • independent decision-making
  • autonomy
  • personal responsibility
  • isolation
  • social disconnection
  • loneliness
  • shared viewing experiences
  • bonding opportunities
  • collective experience
  • discussions
  • communal aspect
  • screen time
  • physical and mental health
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