Nowadays many people travel to foreign countries for pleasure. Some believe this travel has a negative impact on the countries travelled to. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Recently, more and more people tend to visit foreign
countries
for relaxation. While part of society
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that travelling to other nations has a negative effect on the
countries
that travelled to, in my opinion, I totally disagree with
this
view.
Firstly
, I believe that travelling to foreign
countries
has negative effects on the
countries
travelled to is unrealistic. One explanation might be that foreign travellers have the possibilities to benefit the
countries
' economy.
For example
, to visit other
countries
, tourists will have to carry a certain amount of money with them because it is obvious that they are going to pay for the services that they use.
Besides
, there will be extra payment
such
as souvenirs or leisure activities. Undoubtedly, visitors will not only spend two or three days but a whole week or even several months travelling, resting in a foreign country.
This
suggests that those
countries
can make a huge profit from just tourism.
Secondly
, apart from the practical concerns expressed above, I
also
believe that visiting other nations can
also
enhance the
countries
’ culture.
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is visitors will not come home without any story about their trips. Most people while travelling to foreign
countries
will make
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research about the places that they are going to visit. Plus, there are museums everywhere. That explains the spread of tradition from country to country. If a family comes back home from their journey, there is no doubt that they will tell their friends,
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, relatives… about all the good features of that foreign
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.
Besides
getting profits from travellers, foreign
countries
also
have them share their cultures. In short, it is obvious that travelling to different
countries
in the world can bring those more than just one benefit.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural exchanges
  • Global connections
  • Tourism boosts
  • Local economy
  • Over-tourism
  • Environmental degradation
  • Landmarks
  • Commodification of culture
  • Authentic cultural expressions
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Tourism infrastructure
  • Public services
  • Disrespect local customs
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