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the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents.

#visits #australia #residents
The diagram illustrates the
amount
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 of yearly trips to Australia by the foreign. There are
the
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various countries in the chart and the years are 1975 and 2005. Overall, units are measured in
million
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millions
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. The pointer increased in
2005
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the 2005
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 year sharply compared to
1975
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the 1975
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 year. The least
indexs
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index
indexes
 were shown in
China
. Meanwhile, the high rate pointers were appreciated in Japan. Unlike others,
China
 can't touch a
million
 both 1975 and 2005. In terms of 1975 years, the statistic can't reach to a
million
 in
China
,
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USA
Usa
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the Usa
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, Britain. The minimum number was equal
1.1
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million
 in the others.
In addition
,
total
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 was introduced with 8.8
million
. With regards to
2005
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 year, especially in increasing became in Japan substantially. The rising of
Usa
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 was relatively similar. Generally, the total amount equals 30.4
million
. The top number of development shown in South Korea, Japan, Britain, Europe dramatically. The quantity was near in
China
 and
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USA
Usa
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.
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